Ideas: Under my peer’s text they had concluded with the idea that art can be influential in a positive and negative way. I commented that it was an interesting idea but in order to make their thesis make sense to the reader they should make their stance more clear earlier on in the essay.  This fits under the section for ideas because it would allow the thesis to become stronger if their stance was set in place earlier on rather than focused on in the last paragraphs.

Evidence: In my other peer’s text they described  how art can reveal images of events as it brings awareness to citizens around the word. I commented by saying this way a great way for art to be used to communicate but to develop more on the idea of whether or  not art could resolve issues alongside bringing awareness. They could do this with a quote from their Ted talk as most of the artists brought some sort of physical or emotional change to humans.

Organization: My peer’s conclusion talked about how art can be a positive and negative influence and although this was a good point it should be moved to the paragraph before the conclusion. As the conclusion it confuses the reader on the writer’s stance. The writer could instead make a conclusion that summarizes their overall feelings and stance on the issue

My experience with global edits was more influential over local edits because it focuses on the main arguments of the paper which gives it a more significant flow. Local edits focuses on the tiny errors such as grammatical ones which everyone makes. Global edits gave me more helpful and useful ideas for the final draft. I could understand what I wanted my paper to focus on before having to worry about the small errors. Reading a paper first for just the global edits gives you more experience with the text so when you read it for a second time you can catch more errors or gain new ideas.