My goal for this essay is to focus on the thesis of my argument and to relate everything back to it. I want it to be more narrow so that I am not rambling about too many points. Right now my essay is getting too long and consists of many points. The steps that I need to take in order for this to happen is by condensing my introduction and the points that are in there. My body paragraphs go off of the points in my introduction so if I reduce my introduction than I will have less body paragraphs. My biggest challenge would be trying not to get off the course of my argument into too many directions because although I am passionate about the topic, this can cause confusion in the essay. If this is too hard I will begin a new word document and copy the paragraphs I want to keep while clearing the rest, this way it would make the process less overwhelming and confusing. I could also ask my peers and teacher on how to make my thesis more specific. I could look in the little seagull book to see if there are any tips on how to fix this problem.